{"id":11964,"date":"2013-05-27T08:07:33","date_gmt":"2013-05-27T14:07:33","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/www.mbamission.com\/blog\/?p=11964"},"modified":"2022-02-07T14:15:30","modified_gmt":"2022-02-07T19:15:30","slug":"monday-morning-essay-tip-use-examples-to-support-a-conclusion","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/www.mbamission.com\/blog\/monday-morning-essay-tip-use-examples-to-support-a-conclusion\/","title":{"rendered":"Monday Morning Essay Tip: Use Examples to Support a Conclusion"},"content":{"rendered":"

At mbaMission, we always encourage candidates to\u00a0show<\/em>\u00a0their experiences rather than\u00a0tell<\/em>\u00a0the reader conclusions. For example, a candidate may mistakenly choose to\u00a0tell<\/em>\u00a0the reader, \u201cI performed exceptionally well in my job and was promoted.\u201d In this case, the reader is left wondering, \u201cWhat exactly did he\/she do so well to earn that promotion?\u201d The reader needs to understand the whole story for the conclusion to be \u201cproven.\u201d<\/p>\n

We find that candidates occasionally think they are providing the whole story when they are in fact offering only a single data point:<\/p>\n

Example 1: \u201cFor me, as an avid paraglider, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.<\/em>\u201d<\/p>\n

In this case, the conclusion\u2014that the candidate \u201clives\u201d for extreme sports\u2014is not substantiated. One data point is not enough to \u201cprove\u201d this conclusion.<\/p>\n

Example 2: \u201cFor me, as an avid paraglider and budding heli-skier, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life<\/em>.\u201d<\/p>\n

With the addition of the mention of a second activity, the applicant\u2019s case becomes more compelling.<\/p>\n

Example 3: \u201cFor me, as an avid paraglider, budding heli-skier and experienced cliff diver, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life<\/em>.\u201d<\/p>\n

This series of three<\/strong> examples makes the candidate’s passion for extreme sports undeniable.<\/p>\n

Of course, we have used a simplified example here and would suggest that a candidate put his\/her experience into action and show the passion via experience\u2014\u201cLeaping from a ten-meter cliff, I<\/em>\u2026\u201d\u2014depending on the context of the essay.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

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